Old message still a bit relevant? Keeping it, I guess.
9-19-18
Revamp posted! I am very happy this fix. I cut a ton of unnecessary text, and instead of using ballpoint ink for the ropey/hairy background in the last panel, I actually carefully used a different nib! Whoo hoo for using the professional nibs!
Per the suggestion of a reader, I also tried to make sure Kanna and Rhina's faces were more pronounced from each other. I tried to make sure Rin's lashes were her exaggerated points, and Kanna's were softer, more rounded lashes. I hope these changes helped!
Updated!
Old message still a bit relevant? Keeping it, I guess.
9-19-18
Revamp posted! I am very happy this fix. I cut a ton of unnecessary text, and instead of using ballpoint ink for the ropey/hairy background in the last panel, I actually carefully used a different nib! Whoo hoo for using the professional nibs!
Per the suggestion of a reader, I also tried to make sure Kanna and Rhina's faces were more pronounced from each other. I tried to make sure Rin's lashes were her exaggerated points, and Kanna's were softer, more rounded lashes. I hope these changes helped!